I'm unlikely to add vast value to this already reasonably 
thrashed subject, but:

> Yuck, I would hate to work for either the employer or the 
> advertising
> agency!

> Come back plain English, all is forgiven.

There is a place for un-plain English. It can be fun and 
even useful. The problem here is that the writer has tried 
to be impressive and instead ended up demonstrating their 
ignorance. The language is just plain wrong in places and 
silly in others. Where neither of these applies it tends to 
be cumbersome. The impression given (to me at least) is that 
the writer is not skilled in the use of English as a fine 
tool. It seems likely that English is their first language 
(or Oztralian) but that they usually use it in a sloppy 
manner.

__________

> Their reach

Awkward. Better options exist

> they have the ability to leverage

USA'ian ?

> of that

off that?
Poor regardless.

> and get them selves

themselves

> through the door of all their major clients.

Slang.

> Their diagnostic division has been around for an extremely 
> long time

Low grade phrasing.

> ensuring they stay at the head of the pact.

Head of the PACK.
Coloquialism.

> They have an extremely corporate profile

Low grade phrasing.

> that encourages ongoing training and development for their 
> staff

Poorly put.

> and ensure that your working experience is a positive one.

Doesn't scan well.
Poorly put. === PP

> is for an extremely stable team

PP
... You will be a member of an extremely stable team ...
/ ... as a member of ...

> based out of Brisbane,

USA'ian?
Near ... ?

> ...

PP ... :-)

> to do some regional travel

do travel ?
Undertake ...
Occasionally travel regionally ...
Some regional travel is ...

> form time to time

from ...
PP
Vulgar phraseology .. :-)

> customers will range form hospitals

from, again.

> Not only will you be a technician but you
> will be the face of the company on
> the front line

The Somme. perhaps.
Just horrible.
Meaning is clear.
But all horribly mangled.

> ... each and every client that falls in to your territory.

PP / low grade / colloquial / ...

> The successful candidate will be rewarded with:

It seemed to get quite a lot better from about here.
Perhaps they copied copy from elsewhere with appropriate 
amendments.


        R

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